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redshift
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02.01.2009, 02:58 PM

Some minor edits, original line, followed by how I think the line should read with corrections in brackets.

After spending nearly year there building extremely high-end and high dollar on of one of the kind builds

After spending nearly [a] year there building extremely high-end and high dollar [one-of-a-kind] builds...

We also utilized 25” mountain bike wheels with off tires

We also utilized 25” mountain bike wheels with [off-road] tires (thought they were 26"?)

This system is completing removable if the end user...

This system is [completely] removable if the end user...

however if the end user is unable to use there own muscle than we have provided a resting / brace system that will compensate for this muscle deficiency thus insuring the end users head and neck are comfortable supported.

however if the end user is unable to use [their] own muscle [then] we have provided a resting / brace system that will compensate for this muscle deficiency thus [ensuring] the end users head and neck are [comfortably] supported.

New Age Design and a Comfortable Seat
New Age Design. We added interesting curves, outstanding axel & frame supports and finished off the chair with an extremely durable colored surface.

New Age Design and a Comfortable Seat. We added interesting curves, outstanding [axle] & frame supports and finished off the chair with an extremely durable colored surface.

If we can build the best of the best electrical conversation vehicles

If we can build the best of the best electrical [conversion] vehicles

This one of kind (multiple patents pending) concept

This [one-of-a-kind] (multiple patents pending) concept

I have NO intensions of building this chair myself for sale and or profit,

I have NO [intentions] of building this chair myself for sale and or profit,

Looks very professional guys! Get the edits in and I'd call it done...

Last edited by redshift; 02.01.2009 at 03:19 PM.
   
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