engineering scholarship essay. what do you think?

[Finnster]

Some of also just had a few mins of screwing around time before we had to run to a meeting, and spent much of that searching for not too inappropriate pix. lol

Seriously tho, take the criticisms/suggestions however you wish. Feel free to accept or reject some or all of them. At the end of the day its got to reflect your personality and style. There is no one right way to do any of this.

I do agree completely with developing strong writing skills. Really its important for any professional job, and often is the first and sometimes only chance to introduce yourself. Beyond resumes, you will likely be drafting proposals, procedures and reports, and definitely corresponding by email on a daily basis. Strong writing skills are essential to establishing a solid professional reputation.

Also, working people are very busy and tend not to have patience for a lot of nonsense that distracts them from their work. Case in point: its absolutely true that you get about just 30 secs to have your resume read, esp if there are a lot of people appling for the same job, and its not for the VP or some high level job. If we are interviewing for some entry level tech job and I get a stack of resumes to flip thru, its got to be pretty special not to get binned if its messy, too long, un-organized or otherwise painful to read.

Really the only way to get good at writing is putting a lot of effort into developing the skill. Reading books, taking classes, writing lots of papers and have them criticized. It sucks, they are not fun classes to take, but you have to do them. Also, the longer you put if off, the harder it is to get proficient. Take the lumps and build the skills now and you will reap the rewards of it later.

g/l and respect for putting yourself out there.