engineering scholarship essay. what do you think?

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ok so im trying to cut the first paragraph down a bit, but not exactly sure where to start. I really can cut the whole thing out and it will be fine..

heres the ambittions goals and strenghts weaknesses...

just finished it so its pretty rough

10 years from now I see myself with a bachelor’s degree in engineering working for an aerospace or defense corporation as their senior software engineer developing the latest software for the government to use. 20 years down the road I plan to have completed my master’s degree and being A projects manager engineer working with young engineers in hopes to develop their new career into something memorable. A few strengths of mine that will help me achieve these goals is that I have very high standards for myself and will not settle for anything less because I know that I have the skills to get there. People have told me that to become and engineer you have to be extremely smart and ready to take on challenges and that is what is so exciting to me and makes me try harder because I know that once I am where I want to be I will feel completely satisfied with myself. Everyone has their faults and for me at times I can be somewhat of a procrastinator, but since registering for college I have realized that this needs to stop and so I keep myself very organized by what needs to get done and when. Although some work I do is put off until the last minute it never shows and I will not put out any work that I am not proud of because of my high standards in myself.